Friday, November 13, 2009

"War"

The noises of the bombs exploding drowned veteran Jack's voice as he was giving commands to the privates who was trembling with fear and cutching onto their M16.
"We will not capitulate to the enemy; the enemy will capitulate to us!" the admiral hiding behind the bunker, holding on to his helmet so it wouldn't fall off.
"Lets move o-" veteran Jack's voice had died away. He had been shot in the head, causing blood to splatter all over the privates. This definently agitated the leutenit. One of the privates named Zack just got shot in the arm.
"This guy has an urgent need for medical support!"the admiral yelled.
The bombs exploding disrupted the medical helping the private that was shot in the head.
"This will not be an adequate amount of ammo!" the commander yelled holding a three-foot-long roll of amo to the chaingun.
The medic administered another comrade that was severely wounded.
"We will continue to fight without having a respit until the enemy retreats!" yelled the commander who was shooying mindlessly at the enemy that was on the battle field.

After five days of figthting a gory battle, the soldiers bravely toiled into the enemy's base.
"Its tough being a commander, but you guys made my job a hell of a lot easier!" the commander said aloud, standing behind the wooden table holding his cup high in the air.
The 2nd leutenits now gained their permanent ranks as 1st leutenits.

three months later the commander and his higly trained team was going into a gory battle again.
As the commander was about to take a zip of his citrus drink, the glass shattered in the commander's eyes. As the commander lay on the ground clutching his eyes, he saw all his fellow comrades swarm out of the hovel tents into the bloody battle. The commander was indifferent about his eyes but for their base that was about to get taken over by the enemy. He yhought he was doing menial work by just laying on the ground clutching his eyes, he grabbed his radio and called for air support. Everything around him got darker and more blurry everytime he blinked. At last he fell in a deep sleep.
"NO!" a private yelled rushing over to the commander that was laying on the ground dead with a bullet in this head.
"I'll blast them to hell for ya'!" the private yelled as he put his dogtag on the commander's chest.
all of a sudden the private saw a bullet fly at him in ultra slow motion. When it came close enough he matrix style dodged it. He turned around and saw an enemy point a gun at his comrade. He quickly curved the bullet so it flew around his comrade and hit the enemy right in the head causing blood to splatter all over the ground. He found a sniper and went on a roof and sniped four enemy snipers. He rancout of ammo. All of a sudden, he was surrounded by ten enemy gunners. As they all shot at him at the same time and he matrix style dodged it again but at the same time shot them all at once. A bombed land next to him and exploded. Half of his face was covered of blood and his brain was showing. as the battle field was getting swarmed with enemy tanks, bombs exploded everywhere on the battle field causing extra explosion because the tanks blew up at the same time.

When he was in the hospital, he was getting interogated by reporters asking about how it felt to be the new commander.
"What are you talking about?" he asked the reporter, looking confused.
"He means..." the general just walked in holding a basge saying commander," You are the new commander of the army."
"I am?"
"Yes. Congratulations," the general said clapping, then the staff at the hospital started clapping, then the reporters.

2 comments:

  1. Nice Mikkel... good description and details... Keep it up! (^^^)

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  2. Great story, I like how you gave the feel of war in your story, try adding more detail for an awesome story!

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